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After reading the whole thing I only have 2 styles of thinking. I will give you the rude version first.

Rude: This is pretty much just a bleach and fma crossover style story. It ain't even that good. It has a lot of things wrong in it. For instance how are the styles even together. Cause this would be a lot better if this would've been just a bleach fan made story, but it ain't, it could've been a bit better if it was just a fma fan made story, and it ain't. And the fact that both have different styles or believes in magic and culture. In bleach they believe in the afterlife while in fma they believe in their alchemy style. And lets not forget that bleach happens in a place that exists in the real world. Then there is the girl with powers for no reason. Like someone could kidnap someone when they've brought they're daughter to work and then would use her as a test subject? And most of the dialoge doesn't make that much sense.

Nice: This is a very interesting story. From this page I can only tell that the alchemist was sent from her world into the bleach style world. The art style works and it gives a bit of that personal touch. Then lets not forget that all the main characters were shown in the start and it gives a quick idea on what they are like. The weapons seem unique and that faceless character looks unique. When it comes down to stories that are based on known series they usually tend to be the type where fan made characters interact with the main characters of the original stories. In this only one of them appears to be related to a main character and it works since you don't reveal too much. If you revealed too much a person who is a fan of both series would be both confused and/or a bit sour about it.

All in all it could use a bit more work. The action scenes could use some movement style panels but I can forgive that if you're not used to action style manga/comics. Is this a good series? Well I'll give it a 6.5/10 Cause it feels a bit rushed in a way and some of the dialog could be placed better. This ain't my kind of a story but I would recomend it to someone who would take an interest in bleach or fma. Panel placement you can handle so I have no comments on that part ^^ 1 tip that I can offer you is that you need to read the page over and over again until it feels like it works with the last page. Keep this up and you will improve this comic/manga